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1. Students should pay the full cost of their own university studies, rather than have free higher education provided by the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In recent years, there has been a debate on whether
students
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 should pay for their university studies or if the state should provide free higher
education
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. Some argue that
students
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 paying for their
education
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 would encourage them to work harder and take it more seriously,
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 others believe that free
education
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 would ensure equal opportunities for all.  Those in
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 of
students
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 paying argue that it would allow the government to allocate resources to other areas
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 as healthcare, infrastructure, and social welfare.
However
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, free higher
education
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 promotes equality of opportunity, ensures that
everyone
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 has the chance to reach their potential, and benefits society as a whole by creating a more productive and informed population. But
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, in my opinion, making
students
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 pay for their
education
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 would create financial barriers for low-income
students
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 and
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 class
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,
therefore
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 widening income inequalities.
Education
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 is a basic right that should be accessible to
everyone
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, regardless of their financial situation. Investing in
education
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 would have a long-term positive impact on the economy, as highly educated individuals are more likely to contribute positively to society.  In conclusion, I believe that providing free higher
education
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 is the better option. It promotes equality of opportunity, ensures that
everyone
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 has the chance to reach their potential, and benefits society as a whole. Making
students
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 pay for their
education
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 would create financial barriers and widen income inequalities.
Education
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 is a basic right that should be accessible to
everyone
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, and if it is free
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 people would be better educated, and it would have a long-term positive impact on the economy.
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