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The graph below shows the average house prices in 3 countries between the years 1997-2014.

The graph below shows the average house prices in 3 countries between the years 1997-2014.
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The graph demonstrates the average house
prices
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 in three
countries
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, A,
B
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, and
C
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, from 1997 to 2014. Over the time period, average housing
prices
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 in all three
countries
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 had generally climbed.
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, for the vast majority of the period,
country
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 A’s average house cost was greater than those of
countries
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B
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 and
C
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.
Country
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 A’s average property cost increased considerably from $130K in 1997 to $510K in 2003. Housing
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,
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, witnessed a minor fall of $80K between 2003 and 2006, followed by a gradual recovery until 2014, when
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 peaked at $625K. In 1997, the average property price in
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B
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 and
C
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 was approximately $125,000. Yet, by 2005, the average house price in
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B
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 rose to around $375K,
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prices
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 in
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C
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 only increased to around $250K by 2007.
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 in nation
B
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 were markedly lower from 2005 to 2008,
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 significantly higher until 2012, when
prices
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 fell to roughly $500K
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 of the period.
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,
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 in
country
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C
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 declined until 2008,
then
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 climbed steadily until 2013 after slightly dropping to roughly $260K.
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