Some people believe that the experiences children have before they go to school will have the greatest effect on their future life. Others argue that experiences gained when they are teenagers have a bigger influence. Discuss both views and give your option.

It was opined by some people that the
experiences
gained between before
school
and during
school
which one will have the greatest influence on their future. I partially agree with the
experiences
receiving
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during
school
. On one hand, Exploring,
practicing
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, and experiencing the world since
youth
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the youth
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will improve and lay strongly suitable foundations when they attend
school
.
For example
, the students who discover their passion early and practice
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their skill
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skill
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since childhood, obviously, tend to succeed in their life than
who
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those who
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not
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.
Moreover
, individuals who spent time cultivating not only
leveraging
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their skills but
also
strengthen
it
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them
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.
For instance
,
the
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pupils who have done practice tests and extra
researches
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will easily pass
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the exam
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exam
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without suffering.
On the other hand
, several people encountered valuable situations which completely change their perspective upside down during high
school
.
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, the great scientists who won
Nobel
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award
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discover
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their interests mostly during high
school
.
In addition
, the education sector provides
variety
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of
experiences
and
suitable
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a suitable
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environment for learning and pupils can slowly explore what they are passionate
.
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about.
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For instance
, if the younger one
who
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apply
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displays strong vitality and is attracted
in
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to
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sport, the
sport
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department at
school
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is propably
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propably
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probably
the best place for them to thrive
due to
full-fledge
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support machines and
knowledgable
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teachers. In conclusion,
although
gaining
experiences
before
school
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a school
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show promising results, the most impact situation was encountered during high
school
by various citizens.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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