The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The diagram provided illustrates the process of
sugar
production.
Overall
, there are a total of 7 steps in the progress, commencing with growing sugar
canes, and ending with drying and cooling.
As the flow chart suggests, the procedure initiates with growing sugar
cane on farms, which takes 12-18 months to mature. Subsequently
, sugar
cane is harvested by both farmers and reaping machines. In the next stage, the harvested sugar
cane is crushed by machines automatically and made into juice. The fourth step of the process is purifying juice with limestone filters.
Afterwards, the extracted juice is heated by an evaporator and turned into syrup. During this
step, the vaporization of water creates the syrup, which is then
poured into a centrifuge machine where it separates sugar
crystals from the syrup. Finally
, the process finishes by leaving the sugar
to cool down and dry to make the final product - which is sugar
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