Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The globalized world has become more interconnected than ever before in every way especially

illness

and

disease

have become globalized

problems

. In my opinion, we should focus on these

problems

with our

governments

but

also

we need to realize what we are doing about environmental

pollution

problems

. Almost all

governments

around the World are trying to find better solutions for environmental

pollution

and housing

problems

.

This

is the correct way to prevent

illness

and

disease

.

Furthermore

, at the same

time

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goverments

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governments

government

are avoiding

implementation

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the implementation

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of solved

problems

. The best example of

this

is The Kyoto

protocol

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Protocol

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. There are so many solved

problems

about environmental

pollution

in the

protocol

. But some countries do not implement it even though they accepted it,

also

some countries have given up

protocol

. Every government needs protocols like the Kyoto

Protocol

to solve environmental

pollution

problems

.

Moreover

,

the

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governments

should support the building of liveable houses rather than government buildings. In poor countries, like my own country, huge government buildings have been built and they are not necessary.

Governments

should realize that

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quality

of life is much more important than other

problems

.

People

will have a better chance to decrease

illness

and

disease

if they solve

pollution

and housing issues.

Furthermore

,

people

should realize that the

quality

of their lives is dependent on themselves. If

people

want a better

quality

house, they should demand more from their local authorities.

For example

,

people

may question how their taxes are spent and they may want different resources

such

as

long term

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loans for house

problems

.

Also

, If

people

want a higher

quality

of life, they should keep going to develop their own

solution

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solutions

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for environmental

problems

. These solutions may be small but the impact will be huge.

For example

,

recycle

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recycling

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, using public transport, respect

to

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nature,

walking

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and walking

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for short distances. These help to become healthy and

also

make the environment better.

Therefore

will have a better chance to prevent

illness

and

disease

. In conclusion,

people

and their

governments

or local authorities have to focus more on reducing environmental

pollution

and housing

problems

together so they can prevent

illness

and

disease

.