Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The globalized world has become more interconnected than ever before in every way especially

illness

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and

disease

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have become globalized

problems

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. In my opinion, we should focus on these

problems

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with our

governments

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but

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we need to realize what we are doing about environmental

pollution

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problems

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. Almost all

governments

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around the World are trying to find better solutions for environmental

pollution

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and housing

problems

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.

This

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is the correct way to prevent

illness

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and

disease

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.

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, at the same

time

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goverments

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governments

government

are avoiding

implementation

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the implementation

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of solved

problems

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. The best example of

this

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is The Kyoto

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protocol

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. There are so many solved

problems

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about environmental

pollution

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in the

protocol

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. But some countries do not implement it even though they accepted it,

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some countries have given up

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. Every government needs protocols like the Kyoto

Protocol

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to solve environmental

pollution

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problems

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.

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,

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governments

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should support the building of liveable houses rather than government buildings. In poor countries, like my own country, huge government buildings have been built and they are not necessary.

Governments

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should realize that

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quality

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of life is much more important than other

problems

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.

People

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will have a better chance to decrease

illness

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and

disease

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if they solve

pollution

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and housing issues.

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,

people

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should realize that the

quality

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of their lives is dependent on themselves. If

people

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want a better

quality

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house, they should demand more from their local authorities.

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,

people

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may question how their taxes are spent and they may want different resources

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as

long term

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loans for house

problems

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.

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, If

people

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want a higher

quality

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of life, they should keep going to develop their own

solution

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solutions

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for environmental

problems

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. These solutions may be small but the impact will be huge.

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,

recycle

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recycling

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, using public transport, respect

to

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apply

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nature,

walking

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and walking

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for short distances. These help to become healthy and

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make the environment better.

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will have a better chance to prevent

illness

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and

disease

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. In conclusion,

people

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and their

governments

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or local authorities have to focus more on reducing environmental

pollution

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and housing

problems

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together so they can prevent

illness

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and

disease

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.