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demand of oil and gases are increasing , findings new sources in remote and untouched areas is necessity . Discuss advantages outweighs disadvantages.

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With the increase in population, the demand for
oil
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 and
gases
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 is increasing thereby making it necessary to find new
sources
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 of
oil
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 and
gases
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. Current resources of
oil
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 and
gases
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 are dwindling. Many
countries
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 are shifting their focus to renewable
energy
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sources
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 like solar
energy
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, hydrogen etc. Some of the advantages include using open spaces for the installation of solar panels and connecting these to the main grid. Solar
energy
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 harnesses the
energy
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 of the Sun and generates electricity.
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 does not harm the ozone layer and
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 helps in reducing pollution. Solar power does not deplete and continues to generate power as long as we receive sunlight. The recurring cost of solar installation is much lower than the cost of production of
oil
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 and
gases
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. The main disadvantage of solar power is that it can be produced only in areas which receive adequate sunlight throughout the year. Infrastructure should
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 be in a place where solar panels are installed. The cost of installation of solar panels will be prohibitive if the infrastructure is not in place. Hydrogen is one of the new
sources
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 of
energy
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 and is considered to be the fuel of the next century. A lot of
countries
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 are conducting research in
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 field and some trials are already taking place in some of the advanced
countries
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 like the United States of America and some European
Countries
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. The advantages of alternate
sources
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 of
energy
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 outweigh traditional
sources
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 like
oil
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 and gas.
Oil
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 and
gases
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 will continue to deplete and
countries
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 will have to turn towards alternate
sources
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 of
energy
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.
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