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A friend from another country is moving to your City for work . He/she has asked you for advice about living in your City .

#friend #country #city #work #advice
Dear Venky, I am glad to receive a letter from you stating that you are relocating to my country.Congratulations
about
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the news. There are
few
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a few
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 important things. I would like to share
before
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 your arrival. First of all, the
City
 is very peaceful to leave and
crime
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 rate was considerably low . You can happily bring your family
along with
 you without any single thought.
Secondly
, the most interesting part about the
City
 was the cost of living it was very low and you can lead a quality life here,
also
 the quality of the air was
also
 pure.The
City
 is free from noise pollution, as most
of
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the
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people use cycles for their work. The public transport in the
City
 was available 24 hours
, So
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 you can travel at any time without any fear. The public transport was completely free here. You will like it because it was arranged with a central air conditioner.Once you started just inform me and I will take care of your accommodation. Hope to meet you soon . yours lovingly
prasu
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praise
.
Submitted by prasu.kuchipudi on

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