Many people use social media every day to get in touch with other people and obtain the news. Do you think the advantages of this way outweigh the disadvantages?

We are now living in the 21st century where social
media
has
been
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developed very much in the technological development era.
Although
there are some small problems with the widespread use of social
media
, I think
this
trend brings more pros than cons. Actually, when we use the Internet for a long
time
, we can suffer from some health problems like eye strain or
headache
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. Why these problems appear is very easy to explain. If we spend all our
time
looking at the screen of our phone or PC, the light and waves of the screen can negatively affect our eyes or brain and
this
may cause
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symptoms below.
Moreover
, using social
media
everyday
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can be a bad habit because we do not have sufficient
time
for other activities like sports, family
gathering
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or housework.
Nevertheless
, the invention of social
media
provides humans
many
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different benefits in entertainment, communication,
working
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or education. First and foremost, social
media
helps us have an easier and faster way to keep in touch with all other people from all over the world. We can
also
access news immediately with the fast speed of the Internet without waiting for a long
time
as in the past.
For instance
, a football fan in Vietnam can watch the live match of Real Madrid and Manchester United in Europe through a small screen thanks to many online apps or Internet channels.
In addition
, education and
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are supported a lot by social
media
.
For example
, before the existence of social
media
, teachers had to call or send SMS messages to students’ parents, and
this
way cost quite a lot of money, but now, they only need to have a smartphone with online chatting apps to exchange information with parents about their offsprings.
Furthermore
, some multinational online meetings which are held at the
time
when the world was suffering from COVID-19 helped the governments of all countries and the leaders of international organizations discuss solutions to resolve
this
dangerous disease. In a nutshell, we can hardly say that social
media
does not have any backwards, but the advantages of it outweigh the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immediacy
  • revolutionized
  • digestible
  • facilitating
  • niche communities
  • overreliance
  • misinformation
  • privacy concerns
  • decreased face-to-face interactions
  • perceive
  • readily available
  • implications
  • traditional forms of communication
  • outlets
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