Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eating meet can cause health problems. Do you agree or disagree?

first of all ,
food
is the most important
source
for
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many
deseas
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diseases
. Many scientists hold the view that eating animal
products
such
as dairy
products
, meat , and egg
couse
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cause
many health problems so they suggest
to reduce
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these
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product
or
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them by
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by
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plant sources . I believe that eating animal
product
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is
an
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important for many
people
especialy
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especially
who
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have hard physical work . on the one hand , despite disagreeing that animal
product
effect
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on
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public health ,some advocates that animal is the wrong
source
for
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food
.
In other words
alot
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a lot
of
deseases
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diseases
connected
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with
increasing
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consume
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consuming
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animal
food
especially
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animal fat .
For instance
, Obesity
increasing
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gradualy
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gradually
with increasing consumption of animal fat
thid
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this
due to
cholesterol components which accumulate in
body
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and causes many health issues .
thus
, what can be said is that not
onely
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only
meat
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products
couse
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cause
some
disease
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, but
it
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they
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also
have
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high
prdice
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price
.
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
, opponents
and
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are convinced that
food
which depends on animal resources is vital for many
people
. To illustrate , children need
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have a balanced diet for building their
boody
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body
so many
people
have to buy animal
products
for their children and dairy
product
having
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essential amino
acids
and these
acids
build boody kids. For example , egg protein
called
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completely
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protein because it has all the essential amino
acids
so if a family membrane change that to a plant
source
, they have to use more than two sources to achieve all the amino
acids
.
Hence
, animal
food
is really important for many
people
and it has many advantages for children . In conclusion , kinds of
food
are vital for humans and one
source
of
food
causes some diseases.I believe that combination of animal and plant
food
is important for achieving
the
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balance in on diet .
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