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In their advertising business nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative devlopment?

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 contemporary world, there are a lot of products which are new things and all of them have been
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business
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 advertisements. In my point of view, it is obviously noticed in developing and developed countries. In
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what its reason is and
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 there any development in
this
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 condition. First of all, there have been immense advances in the advertisement work and
severeal
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several
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companies
tent
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tend
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 to show their products in order to sell and achieve the highest level.
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additionally
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, a clear example is
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technology
 that in
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most
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countries especially developed ones
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 as America and China are in a
tecnological
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technological
 contest.
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,
one
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 of the advertising
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business
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businesses
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 is
a
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the
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 food
business
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while
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which
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it
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has been
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continuing
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from
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for
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 2 decades.
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, both
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companies are producing
different
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a different
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kind
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kinds
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 of goods.
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, in my
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this
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business
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 has negative development and at
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 time it is going to influence negatively
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the Earth. On
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 hand in
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the tecnological
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tecnological
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technological
business
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 every month produce new mobile phones with
a little differences
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a little difference
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.
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, people attempt to buy
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 and they throw away another
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.
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the
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 result, there are loads of wasted phones and which are
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 new
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one
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ones
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.
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, China is
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in
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garbages
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garbage
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 with phones or
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technological
 products.
To conclude
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, there
are
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 the highest level
advitement
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advisement
advancement
business
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 which
is improve
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improves
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 two way , both
tecnological
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technological
 and food advertisement and there are
a
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negative effects to the world.

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