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Many people use social media every day to get in touch with other people and obtain the news. Do you think the advantages of this way outweigh the disadvantages? (MEDIA)

#people #media #touch #news
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It is a common belief that many
people
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 use social
media
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 every day to get in touch with other
people
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 and obtain the
news
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.
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, there is a more persuasive argument that using social
media
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 too much can make
people
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 depressed and affected by fake
news
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. On the one hand, Social
media
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 can help
people
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 relax with
news
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 and call their friends. It is a happy time for
users
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. Citizens can join social
media
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 so easily. They just need a smartphone or computer with the
internet
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 . After that,
people
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 can create an account and talk or chat with anyone if they want. In their free time,
people
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 always read
news
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 free on social
media
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 but do not need to pay money for newspapers.
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, in my university, students are really busy, so in their break times, they usually join social
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 or read
news
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 on smartphones like Instagram, Twitter, and Facebook,... and get a lot of information about showbiz, worldwide, nature… From that point, they can get much knowledge of mankind and
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 good for their future.
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,
people
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 use social
media
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 too much because they have neurological problems. They are increasingly closed and shy to talk with others. Some criminals can use social
media
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 to steal information and money from
users
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. The government can not control the content on the
Internet
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 because
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 private to citizens, so a lot of fake
news
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 is not good for
users
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.
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, research has shown that sixty per cent of teenagers are affected by toxic information on the
Internet
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 and fake
news
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.
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, the toxic
news
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 and bad friends on the
Internet
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 make them against their parents and teachers.
To sum up
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, there are some disadvantages to using social
media
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 in life. It is evident that the advantages of the
Internet
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 and social
media
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 are helpful for
users
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 in the social century.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immediacy
  • revolutionized
  • digestible
  • facilitating
  • niche communities
  • overreliance
  • misinformation
  • privacy concerns
  • decreased face-to-face interactions
  • perceive
  • readily available
  • implications
  • traditional forms of communication
  • outlets
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