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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter • say why he/she would not enjoy going to college • explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her • suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her Write at least 150 words. You do NOT neer to write any addresses. Begin your letter ad follows

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Dear Harvey, I hope you and your family members are all great. I am writing to you with regards to giving suggestions to you, related to your career growth by joining a
job
 rather than higher studies. First of all, you know I always provide genuine advice which is relevant. I received your letter
last
 week in which you want my opinion about what is the best option for your
job
 or study. Well, as per my perception, nowadays, mostly all colleges provide online classes by charging lucrative fees to students and students find it a waste of money because colleges do not meet the expectations of students and are unable to develop their skills online.
Moreover
, you have already done graduation in hotel management, including six-month training. Now, my advice to you is to search for a suitable
job
 which meets your expectations. You will
also
 gain experience through the
job
 and open a myriad of ways for successful career growth. Online classes only provide theory rather than practical
skill
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 which do not suit your course. So you have to go with the former viewpoint.
Finally
, the best way to find a suitable
job
 is to create a profile on various sites namely naukri.com
,
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apply
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 and indeed.com these apps listed jobs
according to
 profile. Create a curriculum vitae and submit it to various cafes or restaurants downtown for the post of chef, which matched your studies. Surely you will get a
job
 through these ways within a fortnight. I hope my suggestion would help you to decide what is best for you and inform me once you will get a
job
. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Best wishes, John
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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