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Nowadays people prefer to shop in large supermarkets rather than nearby local shops. Why do you think this is happening? Is this a positive or a negative trend?

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In today's world, folks buy necessary
items
 in
supermarkets
instead
 of going to their local street market. The main reason is shopping in large markets is because it is time-saving and get good stuff at a reasonable price. I think it is progress way in the world of shopping.
Firstly
, the public wants comfort during they
shop
 in the market.
Therefore
, superstores are preferable
then
 local shops because they buy all the necessary
items
 under one roof which is not only time-saving but
also
 gives freedom to explore more shops in the stores . In
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recent survey, people admit that they love to
shop
 in the supermarket because they would use their time to explore new stuff rather than going
shop
 to
shop
.
Secondly
,
supermarkets
 sell good stuff at a reasonable price because they have proper inventory which provides them with the freedom to store more
items
 in a single time but it is not possible for local vendors. That's why they are unable to decrease their price and maintain their consistency in product quality.
For example
, local sweet shops, don't have the proper equipment to maintain hygiene and cover their
items
 from flies and dirt as well. In conclusion,
although
 local markets are competing with
supermarkets
 for so long,
supermarkets
 make destructive sales in every sector and do a more profitable business .
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