In recent years, there has been a rise in the popularity of second-hand clothing amongst younger generations. Why is this happening? Do you think it's a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays,

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textile

market has grown up rapidly since environmental activists have begun to claim in

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of animals and plants in order to protect planet

earth's

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ecosystem. The present essay describes the reasons behind

this

inititive

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initiative

and how the indicated measure impacts

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society.

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development is impulsed

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the youngest generations to respond to their view of taking care

planet

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earth

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and its

echosystem

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ecosystem

echo system

. As is well known, most of the

textile

raw material comes

fom

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from

plants and animals,

hence

the

yongest

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youngest

longest

ones think that

this

is a way to stop deforestation and animal hunting.

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second hand

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cloth is cheaper and they do not really care about fashion.

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less money to get dressed

realeses

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releases

more budget to purchase other goods and services. In my opinion,

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is a

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positive initiative

because it helps somehow to make the

textile

industry

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sustainable and friendly environment business.

On the other hand

, it is important to take into account that the larger the

second hand

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market becomes the smaller the

brand new

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cloth turns in. As a

consecuence

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consequence

sells

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go down and so do jobs,

thus

affecting a lot of people that

works

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within

this

business.

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, the previously mentioned initiative promoted by the youngest people of the society is a noble cause in terms of taking care of

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planet

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resources,

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plants and animals.

However

, we must see both sides of the coin, in terms of those who probably lose their jobs if

this

development

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enought

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enough

to impact negatively

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the

textile

market.

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In recent years, there has been a rise in the popularity of second-hand clothing amongst younger generations. Why is this happening? Do you think it's a positive or negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

Due to evelopment and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countires, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Every year several languages die out. some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school. Use specific reasons to support your answer.

Some people think it would be better for large companies and industries to move regional areas outside large urban centers. Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people say that part-time jobs are useful for full-time students because they not only earn money but also gain career experience. Do you agree or disagree?