In recent years, there has been a rise in the popularity of second-hand clothing amongst younger generations. Why is this happening? Do you think it's a positive or negative development?

Nowadays,
used
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textile
market has grown up rapidly since environmental activists have begun to claim in
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of animals and plants in order to protect planet
earth's
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ecosystem. The present essay describes the reasons behind
this
inititive
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initiative
and how the indicated measure impacts
on
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society.
This
development is impulsed
from
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the youngest generations to respond to their view of taking care
planet
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earth
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and its
echosystem
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ecosystem
echo system
. As is well known, most of the
textile
raw material comes
fom
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from
plants and animals,
hence
the
yongest
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youngest
longest
ones think that
this
is a way to stop deforestation and animal hunting.
Furthermore
,
to buy
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second hand
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cloth is cheaper and they do not really care about fashion.
Moreover
,
spend
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less money to get dressed
realeses
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releases
more budget to purchase other goods and services. In my opinion,
this
is a
possitive initiatve
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positive initiative
because it helps somehow to make the
textile
industry
more
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sustainable and friendly environment business.
On the other hand
, it is important to take into account that the larger the
second hand
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market becomes the smaller the
brand new
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cloth turns in. As a
consecuence
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consequence
,
sells
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sales
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go down and so do jobs,
thus
affecting a lot of people that
works
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within
this
business.
To sum up
, the previously mentioned initiative promoted by the youngest people of the society is a noble cause in terms of taking care of
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planet
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resources,
for
instance
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plants and animals.
However
, we must see both sides of the coin, in terms of those who probably lose their jobs if
this
development
growth
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enought
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enough
to impact negatively
on
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the
textile
market.
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