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Some people think it is a better way to leave their home country to improve their work and living opportunities, while others think staying in their own country is a better choice. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It has become a popular trend today to migrate to other countries seeking a better living environment, job prospects and career growth.
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 some think leaving a home country only worsens life, I would argue that moving overseas has a more significant benefit than staying in a hometown. Undoubtedly, developed nations offer living standards that are far superior to those of developing countries. But
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 providing excellent accommodation, they offer a better environment for personal and academic growth.
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, students visiting developed countries can enrol in prestigious local universities recognised worldwide. After graduating from
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 universities, students will have an opportunity to work for well-known companies receiving a much higher salary than they could in their hometown.
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, people not only embrace better accommodation and education in a foreign country but
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 have a chance to pursue better career options.
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, it is
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 true that the money accumulated in a hometown may not be sufficient to cover living expenses overseas.
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, people moving from Uzbekistan to the UK will find paying for their rent, clothing and food burdensome.
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 these struggles arise in the initial stages of moving abroad, they are usually overcome after a few months of living. Once a migrant finds a job which offers a salary at the local standards, paying for living costs will become less problematic. In a nutshell, a large number of people leave their origins looking for a better life abroad.
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 some believe that remaining in a home country is a better option, I think living abroad offers better living standards and career opportunities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional growth
  • quality of life
  • stronger economies
  • employment opportunities
  • advancement opportunities
  • emotional bonds
  • cultural ties
  • familiar environment
  • contributing to
  • local economy
  • personal aspirations
  • cultural identity
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