Some people rely too much on doctors instead of taking care of their own health. They think all health problems can be fixed by visiting doctors. What problems could this approach to healthcare cause and how might they be solved
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people
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healthy
doctor
. In the second case sometimes doctors can't take care
of their patients as they would want. Doctors in fact some days may be overstretched and can't spend to
much time with Correct your spelling
too
people
and give them extra time and help. This
can create an uncomfortable situation because some illness
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people
need someone like their doctor
, who takes care
of them and give them all the attentions
that they think they need.
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this
problem can be the payment of the cure for the problems that people
created with their own lifestyle choices. indeed, providing a correct lifestyle can be good to have a
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take
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to take
care
of people
's own health. At last
, people
can visit their doctor
more often, so many problems can be discovered and solved before they become serious.
In conclusion, doctors have to do their work and help people
when they need their help; but at the same time
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,time
people
have to understand when is really necessary to go to the doctor
or when they can take care
of themself alone.Submitted by soumya.krishnamurthy on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite