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The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it now. what extend do you agree or disagree?

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there is a controversial perspective, Nowadays most
people
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, the number of unhealthy
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, that kills energy widely, so adults
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 and teenagers can'
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 do other things, like going to the gym or wake up early for taking a cold shower,
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, my friend every day he woke up very late, he did not take any benefits from their breakfast, that's the first things, the second thing, the lack of their energy it reduced dramatically so become idle,
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, that appears different diseases,
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 as Tension, Insomnia and more
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,there is a wide range of
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, most nations in these are, Starting doing gym, running some days in the early morning and that goes up, in two gender men's and women's
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, the average of
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, my mother every morning get up on a lot of activities she loved,
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, yoga
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 a cup of coffee after that go out walking about 30 minutes with no phone, and she didn'
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 all she's friends like her. in conclusion, as I mentioned
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, the percentage of unhealthy
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 will be increased hardly in the future, Personally, I strongly believe that supports my point of view.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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