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The two maps show the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010

The two maps show the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010
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The two maps display the
roads
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road
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 access to a
city
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 hospital between 2007 and 2010.
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, it can be clearly seen that many facilities were improved around the
city
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 hospital by including a bus station, roundabouts, and separate
car
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 parks. In 2007, a hospital was surrounded by Ring
Road
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 and connected with Hospital
Road
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, which was located in front of the
City
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 Hospital. The staff and public
car
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 parks had been added in the southeast of the
City
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 Hospital along Hospital
Road
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.
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,
City
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Road
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 was intersect with Hospital
Road
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. In 2010, an outstanding improvement was a separate
car
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 park. The public
car
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 park was newly relocated
at
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to
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 the east of
City
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 Hospital,
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 the former was exclusively assigned to the hospital staff. Another development was a combination of six bus stops into one large station based on the southeast of the
City
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 Hospital.
This
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 bus station was
also
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 linked with two new connected roundabouts, which joined three main routes together.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, car, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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