The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.
The graphs indicate the monthly temperature in a
year
in
Brisbane
and
Canberra
in Australia respectively,
along with
it, the number of rainy
days
in each month.
Overall
, the average heat in
Brisbane
is higher than the
Canberra
,
furthermore
, some hottest months in the middle
year
in
Canberra
are equivalent to the coldest day in
Brisbane
during the same period of time.
On the other hand
, the total length of rainy
days
in
Brisbane
is higher than in
Canberra
, in which the rainy seasons in
Brisbane
are at the beginning of the
year
while
the month with
longest
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reainy
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rainy
days
are
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is
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shown in the middle of the
year
in
Canberra
. In
Brisbane
, the highest data could be seen in February at 30
degrees
followed by a consistent drop to 20
degrees
in July, similar to the other city, where the figure experience a more dramatic drop to 10
degrees
in July, which is the same as the lowest
degrees
in
Brisbane
, the same month.
On the other hand
, there are more rainy
days
in
Brisbane
than in
Canberra
, the most humid period in
Brisbane
is between January and March,
while
in
Canberra
, there are more
days
raining between June and August.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand, while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, brisbane, canberra, days, degrees with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average daily maximum
  • average daily minimum
  • rainfall
  • degrees Celsius (°C)
  • anomalies
  • trends
  • geographic location
  • climate zones
  • seasonal changes
  • data representation
  • comparison
  • temperature range
  • weather patterns
  • statistical analysis
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