The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.
The graphs indicate the monthly temperature in a
year
in Brisbane
and Canberra
in Australia respectively, along with
it, the number of rainy days
in each month.
Overall
, the average heat in Brisbane
is higher than the Canberra
, furthermore
, some hottest months in the middle year
in Canberra
are equivalent to the coldest day in Brisbane
during the same period of time. On the other hand
, the total length of rainy days
in Brisbane
is higher than in Canberra
, in which the rainy seasons in Brisbane
are at the beginning of the year
while
the month with longest
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the longest
reainy
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rainy
days
are
shown in the middle of the Change the verb form
is
year
in Canberra
.
In Brisbane
, the highest data could be seen in February at 30 degrees
followed by a consistent drop to 20 degrees
in July, similar to the other city, where the figure experience a more dramatic drop to 10 degrees
in July, which is the same as the lowest degrees
in Brisbane
, the same month.
On the other hand
, there are more rainy days
in Brisbane
than in Canberra
, the most humid period in Brisbane
is between January and March, while
in Canberra
, there are more days
raining between June and August.Submitted by unapoya0916 on
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