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In many cities, planners tend to arrange shops, schools, offices, and homes in specific areas and separate them from each other. Do you think the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?

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In modern
cities
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, it has become a standard to separate services
such
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 as accommodation,
shops
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, public institutions and others into different areas to make a clear distinction between them.
Although
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 not everybody welcomes
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 new approach to organisation, I would argue that by
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 arrangement, engineers and architects significantly improve the living experience in
cities
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. People who are not fond of a separate design may argue that the citizens of
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cities
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 may find it difficult to navigate through buildings since
shops
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, offices, and public institutions may be separated by long distances. When buildings are packed into regions in accordance with their purpose, each region usually covers a massive area, and moving between various institutions requires traversing longer distances compared to conventional
cities
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.
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, parents may find it difficult to bring their children to school and
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 navigate to their work.
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, establishing a well-organised transportation system throughout a
city
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 can become a trivial solution to
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 problem. On the bright side, living areas significantly improve on giving its residents a good experience with the new design of
cities
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. Inhabitants do not have to deal with the increased levels of noise from
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, traffic and schools if their accommodation is isolated.
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, it makes similar services easy to locate.
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,
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 of being scattered throughout the entire
city
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,
shops
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 will have a single entry point in one area.
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, in terms of living convenience, contemporary
cities
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 having separated businesses,
shops
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 and living areas provide a much superior experience to their inhabitants compared to their traditional counterparts.
To conclude
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,
city
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 planners today increasingly distinguish between apartment buildings, schools and business locations, which, I believe, brings a better organisation to the
city
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 infrastructure and results in excellent living conditions for residents.

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coherence and cohesion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Segregation
  • Urban areas
  • Residential
  • Commercial
  • Industrial
  • Systematic development
  • Amenity provision
  • Urban management
  • Pollution
  • Quality of life
  • Transportation costs
  • Environmental impact
  • Social segregation
  • Amenities
  • Services
  • Income neighborhoods
  • Vibrant
  • Accessible
  • Travel times
  • Social interaction
  • Mixed-use developments
  • Sustainable urban planning
  • Walking
  • Cycling
  • Public transport
  • Urban sprawl
  • Green spaces
  • Agricultural land
  • Biodiversity
  • Business hubs
  • Investments
  • Employment opportunities
  • Economic growth
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