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You are preparing an outdoors event. Write a letter to your friend to ask for help with the arrangements. In your letter include: what the event is why the event will happen how your friend can help you

#event #friend #arrangements
Dear Ahmad, Hope you are fine and doing well. It's been a long time since we met each other and I'm writing
this
 letter because I need your help. In fact I'm going to arrange an
event
 for my younger brother Ali's birthday and wish to make
this
event
 unforgettable. I need your core participation and attention to make
this
event
sucessful
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successful
 and the most memorable
event
of
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in
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 the town. But let me add one more important thing that, I'm planning to organise the
event
 in an open area or an outdoor place rather than in a hall or marquee. Please join me as soon as possible and take over the
managment
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management
 of the
event
. I know that you have great expercienced in
event
 managment and planning. You better know that I can't handle all the
arrangments
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 alone. So please take the first available flight and try to arrive soon and help me breathe a sigh of relief. I hope you never let me down. Yours Sincerely, Kunwar
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coherence cohesion
Try to use a variety of sentences and more complex structures to improve the cohesion and make the text more engaging.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear and more formal closing line, enhancing the overall formality and appropriateness of the letter.
task achievement
You have addressed the task well, providing clear information about the event, its purpose, and how your friend can help. For a higher score, include more detailed plans or specific tasks your friend could handle, to make the response even more complete.
task achievement
Maintain a consistent and suitable writing tone throughout the letter. The informal tone is appropriate for writing to a friend, but ensure it's balanced with clarity around the request and explanations.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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