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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting renting one is very important for people. Why might ths be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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Nowadays
Vehicles
 become
integral
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 part
in
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of
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peoples’
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people’s
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 daily
life
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lives
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 in British. International laws should be implemented to control the
usage
 of
vehicles
 and ownership . I would agree people should not rely on their own
vehicle
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vehicles
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 it may become high
usage
 of patrols and high rate of CO2 emissions and pollution . I believe developing more public
transports
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transport
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 and using alternate
transports
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transport
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 to facilitate public transportation will reduce
usage
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the usage
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 of
vehicles
 in
term
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terms
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 of public buses , trains , Private Ferry ( School Buses) and so on. If public transportation
running
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runs
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smooth
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smoothly
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 and
good
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in
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facilities , people will prefer to take public
transports
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transport
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 so that they
not
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do not
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 need to worry about parking fees and parking locations. In addition,
peoples
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people
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 can minimise their daily costs like petrol expenses , parking fees and
vehicles repairs
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vehicle repair
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 costs.
In addition
 ,
government
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the government
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 can control
usage
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the usage
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 of
vehicles
 by increasing
of
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apply
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vehicle taxations
or
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apply
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limit
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limiting
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 the patrol
usage
 for each vehicle or
restrict
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restricting
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 buying
vehicles
 by
their
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apply
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age. There may
cause
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 some debate about using of more
vehicles
.
Peoples
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People
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 should reduce using
vehicles
 in their daily life unless
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apply
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otherwise
 there is a family long
trips
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trip
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 or some reasons like health problems and urgent incidents.
However
 ,
peoples
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people
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are preferring
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prefer
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 to use
own
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their own
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vehicles
 during
pandemic
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due to
high
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the high
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chances
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chance
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to get
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of getting
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infected. Public transport are majority
areas
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of areas
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 to get infected
due to
peoples
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people
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 from different
location
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locations
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gather
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gathering
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 and close
contacts
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contact
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 with everyone.
That is
 one of a disadvantage of using public
transports
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transport
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.
Moreover
, because of public transport break down,
majority
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the majority
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 part of urban operations may
affect
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be affected
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due to
 traffic
jam
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jams
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 and overcrowded.
To conclude
, these days
due
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apply
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to
highly
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high
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usage
 of patrols may lead to pollution which
cause
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causes
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 climate
changes
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change
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 and global warming. Technology influence
on
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apply
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people
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people's
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 daily life and substitute
as
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for
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 normal
live
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life
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. There are
variety
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a variety
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choices
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of choices
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rather
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other
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 than using
vehicles
. Governments and
resident
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residents
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 need to negotiate and make a strategy to minimize
using
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the use
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 of more
vehicles
,
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apply
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so that the gold is set as per ambition.
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