In many countries women no longer feel the need to get married. Some people believe that this is because women are able to earn their own income and therefore do nor require the financial security that marriage can bring. To waht extent do you agree or disagree?

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All around the world females feel that there is no freedom for them to get married. Nowadays women can work and have their own payment
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some Society guys think
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topic plays an axial role in Independence for
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group
otherwise
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they feel no financial dependency on other ones. I partially agree with
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opinion
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the reasons which will be discussed in the following paragraphs. As you know
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type of human entered in work atmosphere in the
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era and had pretty fast progress in the way of success.
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they can earn good money and easily pay the bills and walk through the way of their wishes without any nuisance and responsibility to any other one.
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, now my aunt is 30 years old and has not married yet.
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, she has no plan for
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work
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her brothers and sisters believe she is in a really hard situation, but she is living easily.
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, I believe that financial problems are not the only reason for ladies to start a shared life with someone.
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is a fact that money curbs many problems but today in
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modern lifestyle humans can decide for their own living and like so many other decisions like eating either Chinese or Italian food, either shared life or being single has dependence on that special person
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there is no social treatment for
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topic and
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is my personal opinion. Just for a little example, I have my wedding at age 23
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my friends do not even think about
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. For the
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part of speaking, people are different from each other. As discussed in the above paragraphs I partially agree with
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idea that solved financial problems can result in a continuing single life for ladies worldwide and money is an unbreakable chunk of any decision but I believe that
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is not the whole reason and
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just a sector of it even a pretty large one.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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