Some argues that IT has its negative impact more than positive impact. Discuss both aspects and give your opinion.

Nowadays,
IT
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industry
plays a significant role in the life of modern
people
. There are a
lot
of
point
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of
views
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and we can not
to
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make
conclusion
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a conclusion
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without looking into the subject. Does
IT
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the IT
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industry
provide
good
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a good
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or bad effect on the world in general? In
this
essay, I would like to have a look
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the
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both opinions and make my own. On the bright side, new technology
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us a
lot
of opportunity in other ways of life.
For instance
,
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part of schools started to add smart devices for better quality of education,
such
as smart blackboards,
iPads
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and iPads
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for
student
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students
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. It helps
student
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students
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to make the process of education more interesting and increase their marks.
Furthermore
, IT can fix the problem
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lack of work , because a
lot
of students decide to get knowledge for IT occupation in the future.
On the other hand
, it could be starting of
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a catastrophe
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. New technology
are
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developing extremely fast and start to replace
people
in certain types of jobs.
For example
, artificial intelligence
already
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mad
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made
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some
occupation
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occupations
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not necessary.
In
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the same time, it can study by itself and develop the new opportunity without
people
.
This
issue is more serious,
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society
think
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. By the way, a
lot
of popular
persons
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in the
industry
of IT suggested to decries the temp of researching and developing
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artificial intelligence, in consequence of
belief
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, that it is going to
try
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control the
people
in
next
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decade. In conclusion, I would like to say, that new technology and
IT
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industry
is
essential
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an essential
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part of our world. In my personal opinion , IT is not dangerous , if society has
a
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control of them.
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