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Some argues that IT has its negative impact more than positive impact. Discuss both aspects and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
IT
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the IT
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industry
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 plays a significant role in the life of modern
people
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. There are a
lot
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 of
point
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points
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 of
views
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view
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 and we can not
to
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make
conclusion
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a conclusion
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 without looking into the subject. Does
IT
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the IT
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industry
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 provide
good
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a good
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 or bad effect on the world in general? In
this
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on
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the
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both opinions and make my own. On the bright side, new technology
give
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 us a
lot
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 of opportunity in other ways of life.
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,
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 part of schools started to add smart devices for better quality of education,
such
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 as smart blackboards,
iPads
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and iPads
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 for
student
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students
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. It helps
student
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students
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 to make the process of education more interesting and increase their marks.
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, IT can fix the problem
in
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 lack of work , because a
lot
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 of students decide to get knowledge for IT occupation in the future.
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, it could be starting of
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a catastrophe
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. New technology
are
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is
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 developing extremely fast and start to replace
people
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 in certain types of jobs.
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, artificial intelligence
already
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has already
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mad
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made
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 some
occupation
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occupations
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 not necessary.
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 the same time, it can study by itself and develop the new opportunity without
people
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.
This
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 issue is more serious,
that
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than
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 society
think
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. By the way, a
lot
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 of popular
persons
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people
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 in the
industry
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 of IT suggested to decries the temp of researching and developing
of
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apply
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artificial intelligence, in consequence of
belief
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the belief
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, that it is going to
try
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 control the
people
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 in
next
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the next
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 decade. In conclusion, I would like to say, that new technology and
IT
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the IT
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industry
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 is
essential
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an essential
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 part of our world. In my personal opinion , IT is not dangerous , if society has
a
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control of them.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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