You are going to holiday, and you would like a hire a car. One of your parties is in wheelchair. Write a letter to car hire company. In your letter •Explain the reason you need car. •Describe the type of car you needed. •Ask what the price is and what it includes

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to inquire about your rent a
car
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service which I require for the upcoming holiday I plan in Scotland with my family.
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summer we plan to visit Scotland 2 cities Edinburg and Glasgow that’s why I need a
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at Edinburg Airport, and I will drop
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at Glasgow Airport. We are a total of
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including 3 adults and 2 kids. I came with my father who used wheelchairs that’s why I preferred on Big SUV
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. Preferred cars are Nissan Patrol or Toyota Landcruiser 7-seaters. Please provide your best price for all available cars for 7 days from 15th July to 22nd July. As you know, I already use your service for another city early
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I expected
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time best rates. Please
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provide complete details of what includes
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price
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insurance,
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car
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complete features. Please
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make sure the
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backside has enough space to store my father's wheelchair and 2 travel bags. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Muhammad Ahmed

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Coherence and Cohesion
The overall structure is clear, but try to separate different ideas into distinct paragraphs. For example, describe the reason for hiring the car in one paragraph, the car specifications in another, and your inquiries in a separate one.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure to maintain consistency in spelling and grammar, for instance, 'people' should be written as 'people' without a space, while 'wheelchairs' should be 'wheelchair' since it refers to a single device.
Task Achievement
You have effectively communicated your needs and expectations. Just a slight refinement in wording could enhance your tone further—consider using 'would appreciate' instead of 'expected'.
Task Achievement
The letter successfully conveys the purpose of the inquiry and provides relevant details about the car required, which shows a good understanding of the task.
Task Achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and formal, appropriate for official correspondence, demonstrating good use of formality in context.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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