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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Recently, poor communities have been included in government focus which is part of sustainable development goals. Poverty in many countries is caused by several factors, from lack of education to unequal distribution of resources. Most world organizations plan to take action on
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 issue, so world eyes now focus on the starvation problem. The rising starvation data in several nations creates anxiety for our generations
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 since there are many problems that cause poor people. the main reason for
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 task is unemployment after the pandemic. there are a lot of industries improving their cost by laying off employees and changing them with robots.
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, a lack of learning and skills creates limited job opportunities caused by centralized development, so a large population can not access academics easily.
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, to deal with the poverty problem, the government need to distribute education facilities equally and re-arrange the economic policies, Since the equality of education includes sustainable development goals concern.
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, they need to reduce corruption cases by reducing the effectiveness of aid programs.
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, many developing nations
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 as Indonesia have many ministries which consume a lot of money for their project, but in fact, they do not make any significant moves rather than before.
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, strengthening the policies which manage countries' economies will reduce the problem. In conclusion, both the authorities and folk should work together to solve the poverty issue in their country. The transparency of the law will lead to better systems
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 since the government comes from their communities.
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 there are many factors which cause poor citizens, world organizations will lend their hand to solve them together.

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Maintain clear logical progression and connection between points.
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Avoid repetition and ensure all ideas are clear.
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Introduction and conclusion are clearly present.
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Relevant topic with a detailed discussion of poverty causes and solutions.
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Attempts at providing examples, which demonstrate awareness of real-world issues.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • income inequality
  • economic policies
  • poverty cycle
  • job opportunities
  • government intervention
  • small businesses
  • corruption
  • poverty alleviation
  • conflict and instability
  • international aid
  • peacekeeping efforts
  • healthcare access
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