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The graph below shows the numbers of overseas visitors who went to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the numbers of overseas visitors who went to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates data about foreign tourists who visited different places
such
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 as the coast, the mountains and the lakes in a European country over a twenty-year period between 1987 and 2007.
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that in 1987 the coast was so popular for visitors and
also
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 in 2007 it is still the first
distination
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destination
 for tourists. Another interesting thing is that the lakes in 1987
considered
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were considered
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 as low
leveled
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levelled
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 popular
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place
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places
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while
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 in 2007 it
jumping
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jumped
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 to second
place
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 for visitors. Looking at details, the mountains as regards started with 20
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thousands
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thousand
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 visitors in 1987 and raising slightly over the period in question and finished in 2007 with approximately 35
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thousands
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thousand
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 tourist.
However
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, in 1987 the mountains
was
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were
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second
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the second
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popular
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most popular
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place
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 but in 2007 it went down to
last
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place
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between
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among
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other
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the other
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 three options. The next
place
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 is the lakes which started in 1987 with just 10
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thousands
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thousand
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 incomer and shut up to 40
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thousands
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thousand
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 after ten years and
then
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 increased
considerable
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 until 2002 with just above 70
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thousands
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thousand
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 tourists, but after
that
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 it decreased to 50
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thousands
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thousand
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 and got the second
place
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. Another interesting
place
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 is the coast it started as a first
place
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 in 1987 and
then
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 in 2007 again it
considered
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was considered
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 as a first popular
place
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.
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