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Nowadays, many people drive to work or school instead of walking, cycling or public transportation. Does it have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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this
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 day and age, some
people
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 prefer to utilise private
cars
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 for work or school rather than walking,cycling or public
transport
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 essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in favour of the latter. Many
people
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 think that and I strongly
agree
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onagree
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this
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 situation,
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, if
people
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 have
own
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their own
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car
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, they have
a little opportunities
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little opportunities
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.
Such
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 as private
vehicles
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 are more comfortable than public
transport
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.
Secondly
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, public
transport
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 is crowded with many
people
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, so you can lose your things easily and
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people
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people's
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 voice
very
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are very
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 noisy but
you
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if you
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 have a private
car
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 you feel
camfort
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comfort
also
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 your things will be
safety
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safe
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.
Thirdly
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, you will
be save
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save
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your
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apply
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time by using
private
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a private
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car
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, if you have unpredictable weather,
such
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 as rainy days you will not wet in the private
car
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.
On the other hand
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, you will be
drive
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driving
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 private
vehicles
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 you have to know
driving
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the driving
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 rules and you must have to
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a driving
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driving
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drive
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 licence.
In addition
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to
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apply
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you will
be
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apply
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encounter
the
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apply
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traffic jam, especially
now days
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nowadays
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 using
cars
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 are
harmful
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harming
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our
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to our
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 environment. These
cars
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'
gaz
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gas
 carbon dioxide reason for air pollution. So many
people
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 do not want to utilise private
vehicles
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. In conclusion, from my
precpective
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perspective
 even though there have some minus sides
for
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to
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 using
cars
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. I prefer to use private
vehicles
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 rather than public
transport
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.
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