Nowadays, many people drive to work or school instead of walking, cycling or public transportation. Does it have more advantages or more disadvantages?

In
this
day and age, some
people
prefer to utilise private
cars
for work or school rather than walking,cycling or public
transport
This
essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in favour of the latter. Many
people
think that and I strongly
agree
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onagree
toagree
withagree
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this
situation,
Firstly
, if
people
have
own
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their own
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car
, they have
a little opportunities
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little opportunities
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.
Such
as private
vehicles
are more comfortable than public
transport
.
Secondly
, public
transport
is crowded with many
people
, so you can lose your things easily and
people
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people's
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voice
very
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are very
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noisy but
you
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if you
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have a private
car
you feel
camfort
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comfort
also
your things will be
safety
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safe
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.
Thirdly
, you will
be save
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save
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your
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apply
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time by using
private
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a private
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car
, if you have unpredictable weather,
such
as rainy days you will not wet in the private
car
.
On the other hand
, you will be
drive
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driving
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private
vehicles
you have to know
driving
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the driving
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rules and you must have to
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a driving
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driving
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drive
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licence.
In addition
to
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apply
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you will
be
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apply
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encounter
the
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apply
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traffic jam, especially
now days
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nowadays
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using
cars
are
harmful
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harming
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our
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to our
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environment. These
cars
'
gaz
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gas
carbon dioxide reason for air pollution. So many
people
do not want to utilise private
vehicles
. In conclusion, from my
precpective
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perspective
even though there have some minus sides
for
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to
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using
cars
. I prefer to use private
vehicles
rather than public
transport
.
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