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People who live in large cities face a range of problems people in their daily life . What are the main problems people in cities face and how can these problems be tackle ?

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Some
people
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living in a large city can be
factor
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 which
affect
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 on
local
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the local
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 area
while
this
 trend has several certain
problems
i
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 suppose that there are some solutions
for
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this
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these
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problems
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problem
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. There are some
reason
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reasons
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people
 who live
a
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large metropolis have to face to face with
problems
on
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 their life.
Firstly
, the local roads will be congested and
people
 will
use
 more and more vehicles
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as
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 always traffic
jam
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jams
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 in the evening because the residents
use
 a lot
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of vehicle
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vehicle
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vehicles
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instead
 of they
use
 public transport.
This
 not only increases congestion
and
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it
also
It
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also
 increases the
environment
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 pollution caused by
people
use
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 petrol power vehicles .
secondly
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the
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they have to pay a lot of living expenses
such
 as living expenses and rent, the money for their children .
this
 causes their economy
fall
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.
On the other hand
, there are
severals
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souluons
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solutions
for
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this
problems
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problem
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.
Firlsy
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Firstly
 the government should give benefits when using public transport
better
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and better
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use
 their own vehicle.
this
 will make the roads reduce traffic
jam
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jams
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 and it would reduce the
amout
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amount
of carbon from
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the vehicle
a vehicle
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vehicle
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vehicles
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.
Finally
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,Finally
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 the person who
live
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lives
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in
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undeveloped
cites
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cities
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,
they
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will migrate to
the
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cities developed to search for work.
This
make
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 the company become develop and
help
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 them get a job. In conclusion, the person who
live
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lives
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in
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a large metropolis can
affects
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affect
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to
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apply
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their life but in my
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opinion
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opinion
oponin
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 there are some resolved
for
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 that
problems
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • metropolis
  • commute
  • public transportation
  • gridlock
  • air pollution
  • noise pollution
  • expensive housing
  • exorbitant prices
  • work-life balance
  • recreation areas
  • parks and gardens
  • criminal activities
  • security measures
  • density
  • neighborhood
  • public amenities
  • healthcare facilities
  • educational institutions
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