Some people think that zoos are cruel and all zoos should be closed. However, some people think zoo can help protect animals. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Keeping

animals

zoos

are

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being expanded all around the world. Some nations deem that

zoos

should be totally banned from

controling

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controlling

animals

while

others assume that these places give a helping hand to conserve creatures. In

this

essay, I will discuss both these views and give my own opinion with examples. On the one hand, there is an exceedingly increasing number of animal lovers who complain about wildlife parks where most of which keep

animals

an unacceptable conditions

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, especially in the third World countries.

Furthermore

, in most

zoos

animals

are kept

behing

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behind

bars which is not suitable for them since

animals

are active creatures instinctively.

Additionally

, they are fed

with

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vegetables or fruits

while

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they are carnivorous and can affect badly their digestive.

For instance

, three months ago in

Iran

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,Iran

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nearly 59 lions died because of inappropriate diet.

As a result

, a high percentage of animal protectors oppose

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zoos

and refuse to visit these places and strongly make people aware of these huge prisons.

On the other hand

, the majority of people consider that

zoos

can be a protective option to preclude these creatures from dying out forever. Take pandas as an example. They

are perfectly protect

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are perfectly protected

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chinese

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zoos

owing to prohibit

this

race from extinction. what's more,

this

view believers mention that

animals

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animals'

animal's

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real habitats are not appropriate anymore to survive since most of

localities

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the localities

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are destroyed because of human activities

such

as logging, poisoning water supplies and so on.

As a consequence

, not only do

zoos

save endangered species but they

also

enhance the population of rare

animals

. In conclusion, communities are divided into two groups

about

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regarding

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the action of wildlife parks. Personally, I think that both views are correct to some extent but if the government observed and supported

zoos

with investment, Wildfire parks could conserve and block the extinction process.

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