Some people think that zoos are cruel and all zoos should be closed. However, some people think zoo can help protect animals. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Keeping
animals
in
zoos
are
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being expanded all around the world. Some nations deem that
zoos
should be totally banned from
controling
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controlling
animals
while
others assume that these places give a helping hand to conserve creatures. In
this
essay, I will discuss both these views and give my own opinion with examples. On the one hand, there is an exceedingly increasing number of animal lovers who complain about wildlife parks where most of which keep
animals
in
an unacceptable conditions
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, especially in the third World countries.
Furthermore
, in most
zoos
,
animals
are kept
behing
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behind
bars which is not suitable for them since
animals
are active creatures instinctively.
Additionally
, they are fed
with
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vegetables or fruits
while
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they are carnivorous and can affect badly their digestive.
For instance
, three months ago in
Iran
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,Iran
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nearly 59 lions died because of inappropriate diet.
As a result
, a high percentage of animal protectors oppose
by
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zoos
and refuse to visit these places and strongly make people aware of these huge prisons.
On the other hand
, the majority of people consider that
zoos
can be a protective option to preclude these creatures from dying out forever. Take pandas as an example. They
are perfectly protect
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in
chinese
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zoos
owing to prohibit
this
race from extinction. what's more,
this
view believers mention that
animals
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animals'
animal's
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real habitats are not appropriate anymore to survive since most of
localities
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the localities
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are destroyed because of human activities
such
as logging, poisoning water supplies and so on.
As a consequence
, not only do
zoos
save endangered species but they
also
enhance the population of rare
animals
. In conclusion, communities are divided into two groups
about
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the action of wildlife parks. Personally, I think that both views are correct to some extent but if the government observed and supported
zoos
with investment, Wildfire parks could conserve and block the extinction process.
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