The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbishment. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period.
The table illustrates the proportion of
visitors
to Ashdown Museum during the year
before and the year
after it was developed. On the other hand
, the charts represent the satisfaction
of visitor
during the same period.
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visitors
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the number of visitors
had increased after the refurbishment
and it was
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refurbishment
during the Correct article usage
the refurbishment
year
. However
, the percentage
of dissatisfaction
was at the highest position as well as
no response
was at the least in the year
of
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refurbishment
while
the figure for satisfaction
was higher than the
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response
and very dissatisfaction
during the Replace the word
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year
of
after Change preposition
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refurbishment
.
In terms of the table, there was an increase during the year
of
after Change preposition
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refurbishment
at 92,000 visitors
. The proportion of visitors
before refurbishment
was up to 74,000 visitors
during the period.
In the stage of charts, the percentage
of dissatisfaction
and satisfaction
had to 40% and 30% respectively before the year
of refurbishment
. Moreover
, the figure for no response
had at
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percentage
at 5%. The proportion of very satisfaction
and dissatisfaction
were almost same
between 15% and 10% respectively. Correct article usage
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On the other hand
, after refurbishment
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satisfaction
of visitors
rose to 40% whereas
very dissatisfaction
had to 35%. Furthermore
, the result of surveys of visitor dissatisfaction
reached at
15% and the Remove the preposition
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percentage
of no response
and very dissatisfaction
remained unchanged at 5%.Submitted by opshorajhumpa2001 on
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