The most important function of music is that it helps people to reduce stress. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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The primary aim of music to humanity is to curtail
anxiety
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.  In my opinion, despite the soothing nature of melody to anxious individual, I totally disagree as
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effects is temporary and believe that stress reduction can only be achieved by preventing or removal of stressors through
healthy
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lifestyle and seeking
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help when
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be.                                     Melodies
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being
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part of distraction therapy in medicine but it has a minimal outcome when it
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to
anxiety
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reduction and prevention. 
Feeling
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of pressure is an automatic way our body
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to happenings within our environment. Stressors can be from our job, families,  growth and development, in every stage of our lives we encounter different tensions.  In as much as it's part of us many
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for solo
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ways to reduce
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,
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, it can only be for
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but engaging in healthy living and diet modification can create a
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decrease in one's
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level.
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, in
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of failure, the individual 's positive
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can help to make him get
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to start all over again.
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, music can only take his mind off the problem immediately.
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, seeking
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a therapist is highly recommended for some persons with higher
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of
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, some need medical care,
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when it is not gotten can be detrimental to
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person
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and those around them. Take
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,a known artist Bobby committed suicide after suffering from depression without being noticed as his song "
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worry
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" was
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of encouragement to many not
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impact
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to
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the author, had it been
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a
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medical aid ,would still be alive not terminating his
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. In conclusion,
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it is said that songs can be relaxing and
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the nerves, I maintain that successful reduction of stressors is by living a healthy lifestyle and seeking appropriate therapy.
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