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Some young people like to copy the behavior and clothes of famous people today. Why might this be the case? What problem can it cause?

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Several youths love to imitate the characters and dressings of people of influence. It's no longer news that children nowadays are seen putting on apparel like celebrities and incorporating their ways of life
as a result
 of the interest they
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 in them.
However
,
this
 can lead to
further
 decadence among the youngsters.
This
 essay will elucidate these with relevant examples and a conclusion. Luminaries are the group of persons whom society accords lots of respect ,
this
 inspired many folks mostly young people to be their fans and admirers. Intriguing features about them cause a lot of youths to start parodying their attires and
also
 their attitudes. When someone is being cherished whatever
such
 an individual does becomes the norm for their lovers
that is
 exactly what the case is among our adolescents. For, instance a movie star in Nigeria has a particular young girl following her mimicking her gowning and all her values, it became so obvious that the lady was interviewed on social media and she confessed to loving her. Youngsters are known to fantasize about the ways of life of notable personalities which have really influenced the robing and manners in society.
However
,
this
 has degenerated to an alarming rate of decadence amidst the upcoming generation it infiltrated practically every aspect of their lives especially their dressing pattern and lifestyles. For ,example our culture embraces women wearing clothes that cover nakedness and men
on the other hand
 are not permitted to put on jewellery or make their hair but because most female moguls wear half-naked clothes and male counterparts put on earrings and necklaces, the youths emulating them are now appearing like them which has led to various vices and crimes like raping, harlotry and theft. Conclusively, replicating the
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 draping and lifestyles are becoming accentuated in the midst of boys and girls
that is
 basically triggered by passion but has
consequently
 resulted in severe deterioration globally.
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task response
Ensure that all points are directly related to the essay question. Include a broader discussion on the reasons and consequences of imitating famous people.
coherence cohesion
Maintain a clear and organized structure throughout the essay. Use linking words and transition signals to improve coherence and cohesion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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