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Question some people think that schools should educate pupils according to their academic ability, and others believe peoples with different abilities should be educated together discuss both views and Give your opinion

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Considering the wide gap in intellectual abilities of children it is often argued by some that
students
 in school should be taught
according to
 their learning abilities. ,
However
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this
 argument only looks good on paper. Selecting pupils
according to
 their academic ability is not advisable
due to
 various reasons first
such
 a system of filtering
students
 gives a sense of inferiority to those who are not in the group and a feeling of superiority to those who are selected
this
 is harmful to both groups of
students
 in the long run.
Secondly
, it is often seen that the
students
 show inconsistency in their academic performance.
For example
, a student who gets 60 to 70% marks may develop an interest in studies at any stage during his academic life and can uplift his academic scores to 80 or 90%. If we separate
candidates
, the chances of
such
 transformation in average
candidates
 will be almost zero.
Finally
, some weaker
students
 may get inspired by other bright
students
 and may learn to perform well in their studies if they are studying together. The other side of
this
 argument says that if we separate
students
according to
 their learning ability, their learning can be enhanced to far better levels than what can be achieved in a mixed class.
Moreover
, some complex concepts can
also
 be taught to them to make them intellectually sharper and more capable.
Furthermore
, in a mixed ,class some intelligent
candidates
 may come under the influence of spoiled children and may ruin their academic prospects.
To sum up
, if I see
this
 issue in
the
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light of the benefit of intelligent
candidates
, the argument may seem appropriate.
However
, its
overall
 effect on the student community is likely to be more harmful because it may hurt the self-esteem of
students
 and
this
 cannot be permitted under any circumstances.
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