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Question some people think that schools should educate pupils according to their academic ability, and others believe peoples with different abilities should be educated together discuss both views and Give your opinion

#people #schools #pupils #ability #peoples #abilities
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Considering the wide gap in intellectual abilities of children it is often argued by some that
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 their learning abilities. ,
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 their academic ability is not advisable
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 various reasons first
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 a system of filtering
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 gives a sense of inferiority to those who are not in the group and a feeling of superiority to those who are selected
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 is harmful to both groups of
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 in the long run.
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, it is often seen that the
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 show inconsistency in their academic performance.
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, a student who gets 60 to 70% marks may develop an interest in studies at any stage during his academic life and can uplift his academic scores to 80 or 90%. If we separate
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, the chances of
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 transformation in average
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 will be almost zero.
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, some weaker
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 may get inspired by other bright
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 and may learn to perform well in their studies if they are studying together. The other side of
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 their learning ability, their learning can be enhanced to far better levels than what can be achieved in a mixed class.
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, some complex concepts can
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 be taught to them to make them intellectually sharper and more capable.
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, in a mixed ,class some intelligent
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 may come under the influence of spoiled children and may ruin their academic prospects.
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light of the benefit of intelligent
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, the argument may seem appropriate.
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, its
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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