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Even though doctors all over the world agree that fast food is bad for people's health, more and more people are eating it. Why are more people eating fast food? What can be done about this problem?

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More
people
 eating fast
food
 is becoming more widespread in many parts of the world these days.
This
 essay will examine the causes of
this
 trend
,
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 and various solutions that could be taken to improve the situation. There are a variety of different factors in
this
 phenomenon.
To begin
 with, more
people
 eating fast
food
 because it helps to save
time
.
People
 can eat it quickly, don’t need spend
time
 to choosing the
food
 and don’t need thinking what to eat today. Another contributing factor to mention is that
people
 don’t spend much money to buy
food
, they can choose some
food
 with a few dollars they like.
For example
, I always ate fast
food
 when I was a student at university because I can purchase a hamburger or bread for 2 dollars to eat quickly before going to class. Despite these circumstances, there are various measures that individuals and companies could take to solve the problems.
Firstly
, a simple solution would be for individuals,
people
 can initiative cook at home and take away, they can cook the
food
 they want to eat to reduce the use of fast
food
. The second measure would be for companies to build pantry include salad, beef steak, etc.. to provide
food
 in the middle
time
 for
people
 working in companies, there will help
people
 use fast
food
 less. In conclusion, eating fast
food
 is bad for
people
’s health nowadays. It’s mainly caused by fast
food
 helping
people
 save
time
 and saving money.
However
, various actions can be taken to tackle the issue to reduce the impact it is having on the current society.
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