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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed contries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Rich nations usually give
money
 to poorer
countries
.
However
, it does not solve poverty. In my opinion, I totally agree that developed
countries
 ought to
support
 them by teaching them how to stand to be better rather than giving them financial help. A good reason to help poorer
countries
 is that rich nations can aid by investing in long-term projects, and they will have the income to
support
 their economies.
Moreover
, developed
countries
 should show them how to create their own
money
 by using society.
Hence
,
people
 will start to see many opportunities to change their country and their lives. Another point to consider is that richer
people
 invest in poorer
countries
.
In other words
, they can start to put some
money
 in the banks or make international banks to let other rich
people
 come and invest in some buildings and send engineers to discover the country and what they need.
Furthermore
, they can
support
 education by sending students to study abroad to get knowledge and they will help their country to be successful.
therefore
, poorer
countries
 will find ways to stand and change to succeed.
Finally
, they can ask developed nations to give the
people
 who will help to change and
support
 poor
people
 to start work and give them a chance to have a different lifestyle by teaching them skills to use their resources ,
such
 as gold and silver and other and that will help increase their economic.
for example
, a lot of
countries
 in Africa are rich because they have mountains of resources but they don’t know how to take in use them, so the government should send some professional
people
 to see other how they use them and help their
countries
. In conclusion. the developed
countries
 have used their skills to help the weak
countries
 to survive in being strong by teaching them not by giving them
money
.
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