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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed contries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Rich nations usually give
money
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 to poorer
countries
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.
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, it does not solve poverty. In my opinion, I totally agree that developed
countries
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 ought to
support
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 them by teaching them how to stand to be better rather than giving them financial help. A good reason to help poorer
countries
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 is that rich nations can aid by investing in long-term projects, and they will have the income to
support
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 their economies.
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, developed
countries
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 should show them how to create their own
money
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 by using society.
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,
people
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 will start to see many opportunities to change their country and their lives. Another point to consider is that richer
people
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 invest in poorer
countries
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.
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, they can start to put some
money
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 in the banks or make international banks to let other rich
people
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 come and invest in some buildings and send engineers to discover the country and what they need.
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, they can
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 education by sending students to study abroad to get knowledge and they will help their country to be successful.
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, poorer
countries
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 will find ways to stand and change to succeed.
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, they can ask developed nations to give the
people
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 who will help to change and
support
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 poor
people
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 to start work and give them a chance to have a different lifestyle by teaching them skills to use their resources ,
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 as gold and silver and other and that will help increase their economic.
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, a lot of
countries
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 in Africa are rich because they have mountains of resources but they don’t know how to take in use them, so the government should send some professional
people
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 to see other how they use them and help their
countries
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. In conclusion. the developed
countries
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 have used their skills to help the weak
countries
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 to survive in being strong by teaching them not by giving them
money
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