The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The chart below expresses the
producing
Replace the word
production
process
for making sugar
from sugar
cane.
Let’s start the essay with growing
Add an article
the growing
process
of sugar
cane. It is
actually, takes at least 12 months to 18 months. And Unnecessary verb
apply
then
it needs to have process
of harvesting. Add an article
a process
the process
Moreover
, process
of harvesting has two types. Add an article
the process
First
of them is Correct article usage
The first
doing
Wrong verb form
done
by
the help of Change preposition
with
machine
or technology, second of them is doing it by Fix the agreement mistake
machines
hands
. And the next Fix the agreement mistake
hand
process
called
crushing and it Add a missing verb
is called
also
done by machine as I said you. Add a missing verb
is also
Furthermore
, that machine makes juice out of sugar
cane. And then
, the Limestone filter makes it pure. After
this
process
, the Evaporator makes the juice into syrup. And it is before the final stage and it is called Centrifruge
. It is Correct your spelling
Centrifuge
device
which separates Add an article
a device
sugar
crystals from syrup. And then
final
stage is drying and cooling the Add an article
the final
sugar
.
I hope,
you understood how to manufacture the Remove the comma
apply
sugar
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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