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Inspite of the advances made in agriculture , many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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In our modern
world
, new technology has improved our lives in many ways including agriculture.
However
, there are millions of
people
 who suffer from starvation throughout the
world
. There are several reasons behind
this
problem
, and there are actions that should be taken to solve
this
. It is well-known that there are many humans suffer from hunger around the
world
. These
people
 live in parts of Africa, Asia, and South America which means that it is not a
problem
 related to a specific area. In
this
 way,
it is clear that
 resources are not the
problem
 but Its fair
distribution
 is the real
problem
.
For instance
, a country
such
 as Syria is rich in resources like water and land but its inhabitants are dying from hunger
due to
 war and political division which case in unfair
distribution
 of wealth.
In addition
, even though some
world
 organization
such
 as WHO is trying to help and redistribute food from rich countries to unlucky ones. it is difficult to rich some countries with the help
For example
, a country like Chad is looked in the centre of Africa in the middle of the desert with no access to sea or river which makes it very difficult to reach. There are several solutions to address these problems.
Firstly
, supporting war zones, by all means, is very crucial. In ,wars there are two groups of
people
 fighting each other in times one group control most of the natural resources leaving the other group of
people
 in poverty and
this
 lead to hunger.
This
 is the mean of fair
distribution
.
Secondly
, countries should help each other and cooperate together to face the lack of water and diseases. In
this
 way, it is easier to overcome all the problems. Even though our
world
 develop very fast in all fields, starvation is still a major
problem
 in many parts of the
world
. The cases of
this
 trend are various from unfair
distribution
 to difficulties in reaching needed
people
. Governments should work together to overcome
this
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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