As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction

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the computerazition

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computerazition

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computerization

era,which we live in,approximately all

works

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intermes

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in terms

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done

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by technology

equipments

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equipment

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partially disagree with.I will elaborate

clealry

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clearly

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wide

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range of technological facilities,some people

persume

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presume

that all challenges which human

being

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beings

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confront

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apply

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can be solved

extemely easilly

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extremely easily

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whole

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of which can collect ,

analyze

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data.

hence

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human

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humans

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donot

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do not

require to think and their ability of deeming has been weakening.

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the opponent of them

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that for

afew

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a few

aspects of human which is perceptional like

phylosopy

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philosophy

robots are unable to find

pracrical

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practical

way.

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these kind

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of which may be highlighted by manpower so mechanization could not be responsible for all human

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which is not superficial

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indispensible

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indispensable

role

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newdays

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nowadays

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life is

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fact ,

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human

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basis human thoughts are

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answer.

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32
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detected issues

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

143 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Over-reliance
Cognitive capabilities
Critical thinking
Problem-solving skills
Diminish
Augment
Natural sense of direction
Access to information
Cognitive development
Education reforms
Technological advancement
Nuanced position
Recapitulate
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