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Majority of people think saving the lives of animals such as: the tiger and the blue whale which are in danger is spending a money for useless action.

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The majority of
people
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 think saving the
lives
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 of
animals
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such
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 as the tiger and the blue whale which are in danger is spending money on useless action.n I completely disagree with
this
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 concept because humanity affects the environment in a bad way. Wild
animals
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 are jeopardized and they are being extinct day by day because of humanity. Dense forests and timberlands are cut down to open new areas to build skyscrapers. Wild
animals
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 are hunted to take their skin, ivory and meat off them. I think
people
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 can not ignore saving the
lives
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 of creatures because waste
people
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 and air pollution ruin their
lives
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 of them. There are several
animals
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 that are rare nowadays. Provided that
people
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 go on to pollute the planet those rare
animals
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 might be extinct and only pictures and skeletons of them would be shown to the young generation. What I mean by that, descendants would know them as a dinosaur. There is one organization that takes care of creatures globally. There should be strict rules about
animals
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. Not only
animals
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 but
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 the environment. As we know, wild
lives
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 are connected to each other as a chain. Finding the white tiger or hippo is difficult in wildlife, even in a zoo.
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, the sounds of submarines and the navy drive the whales away to another part of the ocean because they can not withstand sound and radio waves.
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, the number of rare
animals
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 is being increased gradually because humanity harms the earth because of their greed. I believe the young generation should see rare
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 in their real
lives
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 not in the pictures.
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