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Many parents send their children abroad to study. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of the phenomenon.

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 of people want their youngsters to
study
 abroad. There are several positives and negatives of educating in another
country
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss and provide relevant answers.
To begin
with
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 numerous parents send their children to educate to foreign countries in order to learn well. There are some benefits of studying
in
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overseas.
Firstly
, their children quickly learn foreign
language
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languages
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 excellently. They can speak the language of the
country
 where they go fluently because of living there.
This
 is a good chance to absorb language.
Secondly
, they are deeply instructed by professional teachers with their
specialist
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specialists
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.
For example
,
the
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 student who
study
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studies
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 abroad in my
country
 can get a job easily and work well-paid jobs.
In
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 the contrary, there are a few drawbacks
of
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educating to foreign countries. First of all, the student who
go
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goes
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 abroad so as to
study
 suffers from homesickness.
In addition
, he or she cannot tend to live there.
As a result
, they cannot
study
 as their parents want.
For instance
, the children who educate abroad can live in order not to know
culture
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the culture
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 of the
country
 where they go and they cannot eat their food .
As a consequence
,
this
 situation causes several problems. In conclusion, many parents desire their youngsters to
study
 abroad. There
are
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 some pros and cons side of educating in foreign countries. I have tried to relevant answers in my essay.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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