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The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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From the map, we can see two possible spots for a shopping mall in Brandfield. There are two potential spots, S1 and S2. To start with, S1 is located in the north
side
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 of
city
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the city
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 centre,
while
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 S2 is located in
south
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the south
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. First of all, I can tell you about
S1
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the S1
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 location.
River
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The river
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 is
right
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the right
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side
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 of it and on the left
side
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, there is a housing
estate
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.
Also
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, on the west of S1, there is a road and on the south, there is a railway. On the east of S1, there is
a
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 empty space.
On the other hand
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,
S2
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in S2
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,
on
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in
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 the
north-east
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northeast
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, there is
a
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an
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 industrial
estate
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 and
on
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in
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 the
north-west
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northwest
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, there is a city centre. The railway is on the right
side
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 and the road is on the left
side
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 of S2. Compare with S1 and S2, there are similarities.
First,
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there is
a
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 empty place near them, respectively on the right
side
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 of S1 and on the left
side
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 of S2.
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, the railway and the road are surrounded
of
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 them. But the differentiation between them is that S1 is near the housing
estate
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,
on the other hand
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, S2 is near the industrial
estate
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.
Overall
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, there are some
differenciations
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differentiations
differentiation
 and similarities
on
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between
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 S1 and S2.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words side, estate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shopping mall
  • city center
  • suburbs
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • environmental considerations
  • infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • development
  • consumer behavior
  • green spaces
  • residential area
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