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There was a debate for many years about the medical care system comparing private
hospital
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 with government
hospital
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. In
this
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 essay, I will provide my opinion
opting
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the
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for the
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 public health care system. In my
opinion
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 public hospital is much better than private hospital. First and foremost, thing in the government hospital is
cost
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is
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and is
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 much
affordable
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 and free of
cost
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 treatment. In our country, most of them are
middle class
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people
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, they do not have
capacity
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 to bear the medical
cost
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.
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,
the
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people
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 are preferring to go to public
hospital
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.
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, the government
serving
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the
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good treatment
with
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at
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 minimum
cost
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.
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which
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 most
of
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apply
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the
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people
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to
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prefer public than private
hospital
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hospitals
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.
Additionally
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, the public hospital has
advance
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 medical
equipment’s
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 and
well experienced
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 doctors and surgeons, when compared to private
hospital
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hospitals
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. The
people
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 are more reliable with the public hospital
due to
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 these amazing facilities. During the
coivd
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cold
 time, the public hospitals are completely ready with the patient beds, medicines, and all the emergency requirements. Though, these things are available in private
hospital
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,
but
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people
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 more relied on
the
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public hospitals due
the
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 well-equipped and experienced doctors.
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, the public hospital is much
affordable
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 when compared to private
hospital
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hospitals
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. In my opinion, bearing the
cost
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,
well equipped
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 machinery, and doctors, it is much good to go
public
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to public
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 hospitals.
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