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hospital
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with government
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. In
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public health care system. In my
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public hospital is much better than private hospital. First and foremost, thing in the government hospital is
cost
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much
affordable
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and free of
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treatment. In our country, most of them are
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people
, they do not have
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to bear the medical
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people
are preferring to go to public
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good treatment
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minimum
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most
of
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the
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people
to
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prefer public than private
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medical
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and
well experienced
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doctors and surgeons, when compared to private
hospital
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. The
people
are more reliable with the public hospital
due to
these amazing facilities. During the
coivd
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cold
time, the public hospitals are completely ready with the patient beds, medicines, and all the emergency requirements. Though, these things are available in private
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,
but
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people
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public hospitals due
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well-equipped and experienced doctors.
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when compared to private
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. In my opinion, bearing the
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,
well equipped
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machinery, and doctors, it is much good to go
public
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hospitals.
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