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Some people encourage watching sports as a way of learning about teamwork and strategy, while others believe that one can learn these skills only through playing sports. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many people believed that the method of gaining knowledge about how the team works and their strategy is through watching sports matches on television.
Whereas
 some people
opposed
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 to
this
 idea as these skills can be learned only when they are applied in actual games. In my opinion, whilst observing the overview of the sports
game
 is essential in the planning stage,
however
, I
also
 believe that the application of techniques and strategies
are
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 crucial to some extent. On the one hand, it is an evident merit that watching matches on tv proves the importance
on
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 relaying the whole plan picture of a
game
.
This
 is mainly
due to
 the advance of modern technology
that
is
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it
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 has become easier to film a match
game
 from different corners which is crucial
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 every player to study the movements of their opponents with the ability to pause, rewind and forward the recorded videos.
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for instance
, in a basketball tournament, part of the preparation of players before the actual
game
 is to study the opponents’ style through watching
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 of their games as they say that the best players don’t just work hard on the physical aspect of the
game
, but they
also
 work to create a mental
game
 plan.
On the other hand
, involvement
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 actual physical activities or playing the actual
game
 is
also
 considered important in developing skills of strategies and approaches.
In other words
, coaches or team leaders should be able to identify the variations
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 the applied plan
game
 that may affect the result of
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.
For example
, there might be
issue
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issues
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 with the court dimensions and the speed of the individual player etc.
Furthermore
, it is more
advantage
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 to learn these skills by often playing the actual games for it would augment the physical well-being of players which would ultimately contribute
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 success
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 the team and among athletes. In conclusion, as both methods have significant contributions to the success of teamwork and playing with great planning,
hence
,
this
 cannot be neglected, and it should be applied at the same time.
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