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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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In many nations around the world, locals from rural
areas
 are moving to urban
areas
,
therefore
, the number of inhabitants in the countryside is going down. From my point of view, I partly agree with
this
 statement for some reasons mentioned in
this
 essay. On the one hand, there are some good aspects when rural
people
 settle down in
centre
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.
Firstly
, more job opportunities are offered. Cities often have many factories and firms,
therefore
, sources of income will be provided for rural inhabitants.
Secondly
, many
people
 move to cities to experience plenty of better health, education or entertainment services which don't grow well in the countryside.
Moreover
, living in a city helps them develop themselves better, it
also
 brings many chances to learn and expand relationships.
Additionally
, when residents from many regions settle down in urban
areas
 together, cultural diversity will be promoted which creates a diverse living environment.
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks.
Firstly
, migrations can lead to a population fall in rural
areas
 and local cultures will gradually disappear.
Furthermore
, when
people
 move
to
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downtown too much, cities will face infrastructure overload, and traffic jams
due to
 the growth in residents. Another serious issue is that overpopulation will lead to environmental problems and the lack of green spaces.
Lastly
, because of the population rise, crime rates will
also
 go up and other social problems
such
 as homelessness and violence will appear. In conclusion, moving to
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 has both good and bad aspects. Many
people
 want to settle down in the city to develop themselves and their careers,
while
 others want to live in the countryside,
as a consequence
,
this
 depends on each individual.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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