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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negatove development?

#countries #people #products #world #negatove #development
Nowadays
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the world has a lot of
similarity
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similarities
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. And it is one of the
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relevant
situation
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. But
persenally
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personally
, I agree because each
countries
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country
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 in our century
has
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 the same products. Why people today copy the
countries
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country's
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 products because we have social media,
Internet
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the Internet
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. I know my own
experence
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experience
 why I choose agreement. First of all, it is globalisation. Each
country
 today has
comunication
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communication
 and they are
dicided
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divided
decided
about
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 export and import.
For example
,
in
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Aktobe has a lot of Korean street food and people enjoy
to buy
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buying
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 it.
Me
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I
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 and my sister always buy it because if we
have
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do have
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 not ramen we never
it
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have it
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.
Secondly
, it is target and marketing.
Usually
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 we scroll
our
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instagram
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Instagram
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 and saw different kinds of
product
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products
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.
For instance
, I saw
the
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cosmetics from
Chinese
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a Chinese
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 company and I do buy
because
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them because
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 in our city I did not see
this
 cream for my face and my aunt has a good idea
open
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the
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 shop with
chainese
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Chinese
 products. The company was happier because they have a new relationship. On
other
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 hand, has a negative side of
this
. First of all, it is scanning or chatting
product
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products
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. Many people did not to spend a lot of money
for
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on
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relationship
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relationships
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 and they started
do
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 the same
product
 with bed quality.
Secondly
, poor
country
 has not got
knew
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new
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 idea to start business and
also
develop
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country
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countries
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 do
this
. After
that
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 everyone stayed on the level. In conclusion, everybody has
own
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their own
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 opinion and
choise
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choice
choose
 for
this
relevent
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relevant
 problem. Every
product
, company and
country
 start to think about
this
 because
may be
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maybe
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 in the future we lost
our
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knew
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new
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 ideas.
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