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Some people think they have right to use as much freshwater as they want. Others believe governments should tightly control the use of fresh water as it is limited resource. Discuss both views and give your option.

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Water
 is an essential-needed for
human
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,
animal
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animals
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 and
also
 with the environment.
However
, freshwater is rarely to be found since the particular factors
such
 as
water
 contamination. In
this
 essay, both sides of the debate will be explained and in my point of view, freshwater should be restricted for
using
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 but it depends on the condition of the country which
have
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 the problem of clearwater. To start with, the community around the world wants to
use
 freshwater for daily
use
. Meanwhile, in some countries, the environment does not support the condition for the community to
use
freshwater
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fresh water
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 because
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of an
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an
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indication which
make
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 a drawback to clean
water
source
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sources
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.
For instance
,
water
 pollution in
river
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the river
a river
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 as people like to litter the rubbish,
on the other
hand
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 the problem is not only from the community but the
government
 interfere with
this
 matter
such
 as the non-well-prepared infrastructure to recycle the rubbish which led to the rubbish will have the end process to
water
. In fact, freshwater is still available to
use
,
on the contrary
, it is hard to find freshwater as the impact of sewage pollution arises. The
government
 should think to anticipate the limited source of
water
,
for instance
, making a technology which
enable
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water
 to be recycled itself and control using freshwater among the communities.
To sum up
, the
government
 is supposed to restrict the using freshwater and allocate
the
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 limited source of freshwater for
the
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important events.
Additionally
, the
government
 should pay attention to the infrastructure for recycling
water
 as it will give merit to the environment.
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