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Some people think they have right to use as much freshwater as they want. Others believe governments should tightly control the use of fresh water as it is limited resource. Discuss both views and give your option.

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Water
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 is an essential-needed for
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,
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 and
also
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 with the environment.
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, freshwater is rarely to be found since the particular factors
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 as
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 contamination. In
this
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 essay, both sides of the debate will be explained and in my point of view, freshwater should be restricted for
using
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 but it depends on the condition of the country which
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 the problem of clearwater. To start with, the community around the world wants to
use
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 freshwater for daily
use
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. Meanwhile, in some countries, the environment does not support the condition for the community to
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freshwater
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fresh water
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 because
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an
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indication which
make
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 a drawback to clean
water
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source
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sources
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.
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,
water
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 pollution in
river
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the river
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 as people like to litter the rubbish,
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hand
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 the problem is not only from the community but the
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 interfere with
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 matter
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 as the non-well-prepared infrastructure to recycle the rubbish which led to the rubbish will have the end process to
water
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. In fact, freshwater is still available to
use
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,
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, it is hard to find freshwater as the impact of sewage pollution arises. The
government
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 should think to anticipate the limited source of
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,
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, making a technology which
enable
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water
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 to be recycled itself and control using freshwater among the communities.
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, the
government
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 is supposed to restrict the using freshwater and allocate
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 limited source of freshwater for
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important events.
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, the
government
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 should pay attention to the infrastructure for recycling
water
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 as it will give merit to the environment.

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