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Some people like to own place where they live, bot other people like to rent where they live. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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people
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 think that it is good to have your own
house
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 to live in.
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 others pick, take a
rent
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house
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. From my personal perspective, I believe the own
house
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 is better than renting a
house
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 to live in. On the one hand, some
people
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 prefer building their homes by themselves. In fact, living in your own
house
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 it will save the monthly expenses.
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, in your
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house
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 you can make
home
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 modifications or structural changes. To according proven by American studies, 70 per cent of
people
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 prefer to have their personal
home
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.
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, the own
house
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 is the most comfortable
home
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.
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, the
people
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 believed the rented place is
better
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 to live.
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, living in an unowned room is a little difficult, the reason why paying the
rent
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 every month throughout the years.
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, you will not make any changes except for basic furniture ,
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moreover
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 there is an advantage to
this
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 type of
house
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 you can move out of the dwelling at any time.
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, my uncle lives in an apartment but he feels uncomfortable in it, after
that
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 he moved out to a new rental apartment recently.
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, it is critical that there are apartments to
rent
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 nowadays.
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, believed by some
people
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 must have their own building,
whereas
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 others like to
rent
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 a
home
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. In my opinion, I prefer to have my own villa
although
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 I am living in an unowned apartment currently, but I will have one in the near future.
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