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Bullying is a big problem in many schools. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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educational research, the biggest
school
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 issue is not drug dealing and teaching quality. The answer is actually
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bullying. By virtue of bullying,
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 not only get physical attacking but
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 psychological traumas. In consequence, bullying is proven the main reason
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 causing children's depression. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate
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 bullying and the solutions from my viewpoint. Most of the bullying incidents happened around the age of 12-18 when
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' mindsets are not mature enough. Some teenagers
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notice
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 others, and some desire power and rights over peers;
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, bullying is one way to achieve both.
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 but not least, family and teacher is often the trigger of bullying behaviour, because they often impose
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 on the
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 who perform relatively
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 on the course.
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 mad emotion to others. Take my self-experience
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, one of my high
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 classmates who receive domestic violence from his father every day often bully disabled classmate in front of the whole class to show his power over him.
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 bullying is widely argued by every country's education system. In my point of view, only resolving the entire problem from the root can absolutely fix the bullying behaviour. And the most significant factor is family,
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 should establish a homecare centre to take care of
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 periodically and support the
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 who are reported to be receiving domestic violence.
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, we should educate
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 from elementary
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 that the consequences of bullying behaviour not only cause laws problems but
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 seriously affect victims' mental health. In conclusion, bullying behaviours occur so
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countries,
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, It is imperative to face the problems, or it may influence the
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 mental health of our offspring.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bullying
  • imbalance of power
  • empathy
  • understanding
  • media
  • social norms
  • policies
  • consequences
  • education
  • awareness
  • promote
  • kindness
  • parents
  • community
  • safe
  • supportive
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