The education of young people is highly prioritized in many countries. However, educating adults who cannot write or read is even more important and governments should spend more money on this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, educating kids and teenagers is predominated in
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of societies but some individuals say that it is
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vital to educate citizens who
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not have abilities for writing and reading and governments have to support them from
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perspective. I completely agree with
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idea and each
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have to settle
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issue immediately
before improving the education system for young people.
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with,
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life of
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who cannot write and read is tough because methods of communicating with others are limited.
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, political entities have to resolve as much as possible.
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, nowadays, many
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occupations
are required to have writing and reading skills. Unless people have the abilities, they might be not able to have their ideal jobs.
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, providing
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supporting
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resources
for individuals who cannot write and read
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forward the economy in the county because some of those people who have not worked well or
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worked in their ideal work environment will be motivated and
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the workload in the country.
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, someone who has worked
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job but
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also
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has been willing to have
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job.
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, he does not know how to improve
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writing and reading skills. That means the political entity is missing a workload for itself.
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, citizens who do not have abilities for writing and reading have to be protected by governments because they are in harsh
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, once those individuals are trained and improve their writing and reading skills, they might improve the economy in the country as the workloads.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • literacy programs
  • functional illiteracy
  • social mobility
  • inter-generational poverty
  • workforce development
  • economic growth
  • social cohesion
  • public health
  • civic participation
  • resource allocation
  • national development
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